I remember
when I had a trip to Bandung a month ago to join together with my old best
friends. We had a trip to Bandung about three days, from Friday to Sunday. We
spent our three days at Bandung in a hotel. On the other hand, we had prepared for
our schedule activities there. Firstly,we spent our time for talked and shared
each other. Then, we spent our time to walked around Bandung, we went shopping,
hang out, culinary tourism, and we took a dinner together in one of restaurant
there until we felt tired and we back to hotel for went to sleep. Next day, we
did the same activities like the day before. We felt enjoy, excited, had fun,
and really interesting to join this agenda. On the last
day, I really enjoyed to shared and joked with my old best friends before back
to Jakarta. Finally, this is the excited agenda for my old best friends and I ,
hopefully I’ll join this agenda again in the next holiday.
Ur trip sounds nice as u describe ur activities there systematically well. It's much better if u also pay a heed to the grammar rules, and the choice of words and its consistency. Anyway, why don't u mark the TS and CS? It will help readers to comprehend ur writing well. Take a look at the TS. U state about "trip", but in the CS, u state about "agenda". CS means u restate TS and SS. Remember that next time, ok. Em waiting 4 ur better writing product.
BalasHapus